美国留学申请文书哪个比较好?

发布于2022-01-21 12:20:35

美国留学申请文书哪个比较好?

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网友回答2022-01-21

一般的Essay包括四个部分:Introduction,Body, Conclusion和Reference)。所以当我们拿到一个topic的时候,我们首先要去查资料,去看下怎么样把这个topic写出深度,然后想好对应的结构以及每部分的一些点。

Introduction

Introduction包括:general statements和thesis statement (thesis statement的定义是:a kind of mini-outline for the paper)。这个一般叫introductory paragraph,通常是为了告诉读者what the essay is about。本部分的最后一句还必须包含一个过渡的“钩子hook”,它将读者移动到文章正文的第一段。也就是要过渡得好。

Example:
Women employees’ rights are not effectively protected. Under these circumstances, labour law may be a good way to save woman from a bad job situation.(thesis statement)
The essay will explain in detail the women sexual harassment from the phenomenon of women employees’ condition in work place and the labour law about female sexual harassment in western Europe. In addition, it will also describe the wage inequality between male and female workers. Furthermore, the phenomenon, the effects and the law about maternity leave in western Europe all will be referred precisely. (文章内容构成)
In the UK, 90 percent of female workers had suffered sexual harassment (Bajema & Timmerman 1998). (hook)

Body

一般来说,Essay的body paragraph(正文段)写作结构如下:

Topic Sentence:主题句(一句话阐明本段的论点)

Assertion statements:主张句(几句话阐述你的论点)

example(s):举例(列举一些事实)

Explanation:解释(说明以上事实为什么能支撑你的论点)

Significance:意义(总结说明为什么本段论点能论证全文的主题)

也可以更简单地分为三个部分,在美国这被称为“汉堡包结构”: 

Topic Sentence:主题句 

Supporting Evidence:证据 

Conclusion Sentence:总结句

Example:
In western Europe, about 66% female employees have admitted that they had been harassed by their superiors (Timmerman et al. 1998). (Assertion statements)
Cela (2015) explain that sexual harassment in the workplace includes one-time harassment and multiple sexual harassment. Women are more likely to be harassed.(example+ Explanation)
If the offender is the manager of a female victim, the offender may use their right to threaten them by controlling the performance evaluation and work incentives of the female staff.(Significance)

01

Topic Sentence主题句的写作要点

首先,注意主题句应该是一个观点,而不是事实。比如:
 
事实:Plagiarizing is to steal and pass off the ideas or words of another as one's own.
 
观点:People can avoid plagiarizing by taking certain precautions.
 
其次,主题句应该是一个观点,而不能仅仅包含一个话题。比如:
 
只包含话题:Today I'm going to discuss the benefits of gardening.
 
包含观点:Gardening gives us pleasure and is very effective to our minds.
 
最后,你的观点不能是泛泛的,而应该是确切的。
 
模糊:The United States suffered a lot during the Civil War.
 
确切:Sherman's destruction in the South during the Civil War also caused incredible suffering.
 
Example:According to ILO (1997), prevention can solve female sexual harassment in workplace, and law-making is the most effective way to avoid this problem. 

2

如何引述证据‍

在列举证据时,首先我们应当保证所有的论据都是与主题相关的。

证据可能包括以下类型:

事实(Facts)

公开发表的观点(Published opinions)

书刊网站等媒体上的调查研究(Research from books, journal articles, websites, etc.)

公开的案例(Published case studies)

研究数据(Research data)

引用证据有三种方法:

引用(Quoting):逐字逐句地复制原信息

复述(Paraphrasing):按自己的语言重新组织

概括(Summarising):更简洁的语言概括原信息

但无论采用哪种方法,我们都需要注意:一、让证据自然地穿插在文中;二、注明来源。
 
Example:
(1998) showed that 89% of Norwegian women had suffered sexual harassment during work. More than half of the women had suffered sexual harassment by superior or colleague have mentioned already. Therefore, the employment of women may quit their job and may claim for damages because of sexual harassment.

Conclusion

总结也是要简洁,其实怎么写结束语,也是有一定技巧的。Conclusion是为了总结你的观点,并建议你的结论可以在更大的意义上的思考。包括:restament or summary of the main points;final comment。

详细点来讲,要点有:

提及introductory paragraph

回应thesis statement, 可以用原始语句修改下,但是不要复制粘贴原始语句。

总结正文Body中的要点。

Example:

To sum up, in western Europe, the situation of the female sexual harassment in workplace is not optimistic. In addition, the gender wage gap is also great. Furthermore, many female workers do not have paid maternity leave and some women employees lose their job during pregnancy. However, almost all the western European countries are trying to solve this problem by establishing workforce regulation.(提及introductory paragraph)
 
 There is no doubt that labor law can prevent female sexual harassment during working to some extent, reduce the wage gap between male and female, and force employers to offer maternity leave and paid maternity leave to staff who is pregnant. In this case, although the law does not completely solve these problems, it is absolutely useful for female workers. These issues have been clearly defined in the labor law in most Western European countries. (回应thesis statement)
 
As a result, defining female sexual harassment in workplace, gender wage gap and maternity leave specifically and formulating the corresponding punishment for different situations may have a positive effect on these problems.(总结正文Body中的要点)

References

正确引用作品原文或专家、学者的论述是写好英语论文的重要环节;既要注意引述与论文的有机统一,即其逻辑性,又要注意引述格式 (即英语论文参考文献)的规范性。引述别人的观点,可以直接引用,也可以间接引用。无论采用何种方式,论文作者必须注明所引文字的作者和出处。

admin
网友回答2022-01-21
出国留学除了你的标化之外就是你的软件背景了,尤其是文书。我再找中介之前就听很多同学提起过,说很多大中介套模板,给每个学生写文书都是千篇一律的。所以在找留学机构上,自己比较小心翼翼。我是对比多家,最后签的慧德留学。从签约开始,后期老师就帮我做规划、从前期的无限沟通交流、到最后的文书撰写,我都有参与。不知道别的家机构是什么样子,但是经历过这次申请,我觉得文书真的很重要,如果你没有亲身参与其中,根本不知道机构老师会给你写成什么样子。
admin
网友回答2022-01-21

找中介帮你搞定就可以了,美国留学手续挺多的,首先需要提供资金证明、推荐信、护照、签证、offer等等;其次需要语言成绩,雅思或是托福,上一阶段的学习成绩和学历证明。

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